day tripper

Hey guys, now that I'm done the story - it's time for some rewriting and fixing up! Here's Chapter one rewritten and in a new point of view! :D Chapter ...

ODYSSEUSS?! DUDE WE JUST GOT DONE THIS BOOK IN ENGLISH! ha now I have to do a brochure on one of the placed odysseus visited on his journey back to ...

Black(: Ebony whatever you want to call it. If you go into romance fiction and click "Oi Pierre" and read that, it will show you the description I fallowed.

Holaa chickaa. Got yer message and I'm here to help again. I'm not a critisizing Nazi, but I did noticed like a lot of grammer and sentence usage mistakes in ...

I'M BACK. dundundun(: Nah, don't be worried, I'm not some hardcore um.. female dog.. that critisizes EVERYTHING. I'm just here to help!(: Aight aight, yo, here: The first: " Pulling ...

Okay so I see about 8 things here to fix(: But I'm about to run out the door for lacrosse practice so I'll get back to that later. I really ...

Thanks!(:

Haha; yeah guys that is My Little Pony. Thanks though!(: And yes I did draw it, Kinzygirl223

Haha I got bored one night;

This is a character I drew(: I'll most deff. upload a better picture when I finally charge my camera!

I've read over your piece and over the other reviews and I must agree with them all, they took everything I needed to say. This does need some work. For ...

Holaa! I really liked this. It's concept, details, and the traditional smart girl tutors doofus boy. Love it(: There were a few things I caught though; Hey guys! A STORY!! ...

* Thanks to some advice, I have indeed revised some of it and now it should be good! Thanks guys! :wink: * My fingers moved in harmony as I stared ...

...Before it's too late." ( Thought of by me!(: ) Hey guys! Comment it if you like it, but any feedback would be GREATLY appreciated! Prefrence: You know those times ...

AH! Okay so like I said, I would comment when I was done. I have a LOT of favorite stories, and for me to claim something as a top, it's ...